Sunday, April 19, 2015

Updates and apologies

I’m afraid I’ve neglected this blog over the past two or three months. I apologize for that, it wasn’t through lack of desire or lack of ideas, more lack of time. I took my US citizenship test a few weeks ago and tax season here in the USA is a very trying time with my wife working long hours six days a week and me working Saturdays in addition to my normal job. Thankfully that is over now so perhaps I can get back to some serious writing.

One thing I did manage to get time for was to give "The Lichfield Conspiracy" a complete re-write and the new edition is available in paperback and e-book on Amazon at:


Meanwhile my weekly column in the Putnam Herald is now approaching it’s sixth anniversary and “Cheating”, the fifth in the Dean and Steph detective series is progressing slowly but surely as is the revision of “The Prince’s Puzzle”, which I hope to have available by the summer.

One of my main problems with publishing my own books is the cover picture. Sure, I can use free, public domain pictures but suitable ones are very hard to find. So far I’ve been lucky, Guilty?, Weoley and Traitor all have my own photographs on the front cover but now I’m stuck trying to find something suitable for the cover of a seventeenth century English Civil War detective novel. I could pay for a picture but my aim is to get my work out there to as many people as possible, as cheaply as possible so I’ll keep trying.

And that brings me neatly to my last comment. In an effort to reach as wide an audience as possible, “Guilty?”, the first book in the Dean and Steph series, will be available free for e-readers on Amazon from Friday, April 24 until Monday, April 27. If you would like a copy the link is below;



As usual, feedback and reviews are welcome. Happy reading until next time

Wednesday, December 17, 2014

A story for Christmas

I know it’s been two or three weeks since I posted anything here but I do have a good excuse. I have promised two or three new books for the New Year and I intend to honor that but I thought I’d surprise you and get one done for Christmas. It’s been a long task but it’s now done and ‘Hessians’, a tale of adventure in the Revolutionary War was published on Amazon, Kindle and in major bookstores today.


 but, rather than me waffling on about it, here is the prologue, I hope you enjoy it and want to read more. A very Merry Christmas to you all.

PROLOGUE

The silence was the strange thing. A line of a thousand men would normally be humming with talk but it seemed not one of them had the energy to speak as the ragged column straggled along the muddy road. They were dirty, wet, tired beyond reason, out of step and dispirited. Their heads were bowed against the wind-driven rain, their weary footsteps were slow and their clothes provided little protection against the harsh winter weather.
Some still wore semblances of what had once been uniforms, weather-faded blue serge coats with facings of red or buff. Most were dressed in homespun or linen that had long-since been worn into tatters. Some still had boots; others the remnants of shoes, one or two wrapped their feet in stained and bloody rags. For the main part they were bareheaded in the wet, the hat is the first thing to go when a soldier breaks and runs.
They came in ones and twos, in single file or small bunches. There was little sign of cohesive units. No companies or platoons. No one looked as if he were leading them. Each man just numbly followed in the footsteps of the one in front of him. Their weapons, a mixture of muskets, rifles, sporting guns or just poles with knives lashed to them, were carried a thousand different ways; anything to ease the burden on war-weary muscles.
Here and there a man led a gaunt horse but the animals were as tired as their masters and their heads drooped in exhaustion. These were the cavalry, the once proud eyes of the army, now reduced to the beaten weariness of their infantry brethren. Then came a lone gun. A six-pounder brass field piece, its muzzle still blackened with the burnt powder residue of overuse.
The gunners, as dirty and tired as the rest, led, cajoled and cursed the three underfed mules pulling the piece. Every few yards the weight of the barrel drove the wheels of the weapon deep into the glutinous mud already churned by a thousand feet. When it did so the mules shuddered to a halt, their heads down and their eyes dull. There was only one way to move on. The gunners got down into the mud and pushed at wheel spokes until slowly the animals and their load eased forward again. The men looked as bone-weary as the mules but they stubbornly stuck to their task and the column snaked on.
Lieutenant James Holte, sheltering as best he could under the winter-bared boughs of a spreading maple tree, watched the defeated army go past, his eyes narrowed and his face grim. He sensed rather than saw someone move up alongside him but did not immediately turn to see who it was.
‘A rabble, aren’t they?’ a voice said after a moment. Holte nodded slowly and glanced at the newcomer. Unlike the men passing before the two of them Captain Simon Howard still wore the blue and buff of Washington’s headquarters’ staff and the horse he held by its reins was sleeker, more alert and better fed than the others.
‘They’ve come a long way since Long Island,’ Holte said carefully. ‘They’ve seen a lot of fighting and have been beaten once too often.’
‘Can they take another beating?’
Holte looked back at the road. One of the men who were passing slipped, dropped his broken musket and fell to his knees in the mud. He was hardly more than a boy yet his sunken-cheeked face bore the experience of a lifetime. For a moment he just knelt there, mouth open and eyes closed, then two other soldiers stopped. They each took an arm and hauled the boy to his feet before slipping his arms around their shoulders. Together they half-dragged him on, leaving the broken musket lying in the mud.
Holte shook his head.
‘No,’ he said, ‘not now.’ He paused and looked at Howard again. ‘Are they going to get beaten again?’ he asked. ‘Because if they are you aren’t going to have any army left.’
Howard grimaced.
‘Who knows? If Lord Howe has any sense at all, he will have his light troops snapping at our heels and his main column just behind. Fortunately for us though, no one has ever accused his Lordship of having much sense. He could have taken us at Long Island and again at New York or he could have caught us as we crossed the rivers on the way down here, but he didn’t.’ He shook his head, ‘No, my guess is that he’ll go into winter quarters and will leave the weather and starvation to finish us off.’
‘They will,’ Holte said, ‘unless we can rest and get supplies soon.’
‘We’ll rest tonight,’ Howard replied, ‘but supplies are going to be harder to get. We abandoned a lot of valuable stuff up north.’ He hesitated and then added, ‘That’s where you and your scoundrels come in. I have a job for you. How many do you have left?’
Holte forgot the passing column and turned to face Howard. War and attrition had shrunk his company just as it had the rest of the army. Like the others they needed rest and a good feed but they were in better shape than most. At least they were still a unit.
‘I’ve got twenty-eight,’ he said.
‘Where?’ Howard demanded, looking around. Holte whistled shrilly and his men appeared, seeming to rise out of the ground and stepping from behind trees and bushes. They were tough men, some very young, some older. Several were bearded, the rest clean-shaven and, like Holte himself, each wore a leather hunting shirt dyed green, gray or brown. Every man carried a Pennsylvania rifle, the locks carefully wrapped against the mud and damp.
‘Very well,’ Howard said. He nodded, ‘Twenty-eight will have to do.’
Holte rested the butt plate of his own rifle on the fallen leaves at his feet and crossed his arms over the muzzle.
‘Do for what?’ he demanded.
‘To get supplies for the army.’
‘We’re not quartermasters.’
‘No, you’re fighting soldiers and that’s what this job needs. These supplies are back in New Jersey.’
Holte grimaced,
‘And the enemy is holding New Jersey,’ he said. Howard nodded, his eyes carefully weighing the other man’s reaction.
‘Just how much stuff do you think twenty-eight men can sneak out from behind British lines?’ Holte said. ‘We’ll only be able to carry enough to feed ourselves.’
‘There are wagons,’ Howard said. ‘A dozen wagons and the teams to pull them.
Holte frowned. What Howard was saying was ridiculous. Twenty- eight men could not take a dozen wagons back across the Delaware, load them with supplies and hope to get them out again. It was not possible.
‘There are ten-thousand redcoats over there,’ he said. ‘They might object.’
‘Hopefully they won’t know,’ Howard told him. ‘I’m told these supplies are hidden in the backwoods where the enemy is unlikely to look for them or to even have a garrison.’
‘Where?’
‘A place called Wixford. It’s on a tributary of the Delaware called the Arrow River, about twenty miles from Trenton.’
Holte did some rapid thinking. If his men rested and ate a hot meal or two they could cover twenty miles in a night march. Wagons could not though; they would be lucky to make ten miles a day in this weather. If they took back roads that were nothing more than muddy tracks they might manage five miles a day at best. They also had to cross the Delaware under the noses of enemy patrols. It could not be done.
He told Howard so.
‘You don’t have to take the wagons. They’re already with the supplies,’ Howard told him. ‘All you have to do is to get there and get them out.’
‘A day to get there, five days at least to get back, and only twenty-eight men to watch over a dozen wagons? I still think it can’t be done.’
Howard laughed.
‘You have the mind of a soldier, Mr. Holte,’ he said. ‘War isn’t like that. It’s about politics.’
‘Politics?’
‘Yes, politics. These are New Jersey stores. They were collected in New Jersey, by the people of New Jersey for the sole use of New Jersey militia. They wouldn’t let you have them even if you went for them. No, they have to be collected by New Jersey troops and I have a battalion of fresh militia from that colony ready to go.’
‘So why do you need us?’
‘I need you because, as I said, these are fresh troops. They’ve never seen a musket fired in anger. They’re green as the grass in summer and their colonel is greener.’
‘Colonel?’
‘Colonel Marcus Van Derijk of the New York Van Derijk’s.’
‘Never heard of him.’
‘His family owns a lot of land on Manhattan Island but his place is in New Jersey. Seems he owns about half the colony. He raised the militia himself and paid for their equipment.’
‘He’s a soldier?’
‘He served as an ensign under Braddock back in ’fifty-seven but never saw any fighting.’
‘So he knows nothing about soldiering?’
Howard smiled ruefully and said,
‘Don’t tell him that. He has the British army book of infantry maneuvers and thinks he knows it all.’
‘And I’m supposed to hold his hand whilst he retrieves his stores?’

‘You’re supposed to pretend to be under his command and to keep him out of trouble. We can’t afford to lose a hundred militia as well as the stores.’

Thursday, November 20, 2014

The joys of editing:

To my mind one of the hardest parts of novel writing comes after you have typed those two magic words, ‘The End’.

That’s when the editing starts and it is a long, trying road. I don’t know how others tackle it but my method is to put the story aside for a day or two. Once the euphoria of finishing has dissipated I go back to it and go through the whole thing looking for the helpful hints that Microsoft Word has given me. The red underlining indicating spelling errors is easy to fix, you either add the word to the dictionary or spell it correctly. Green underlining is harder to fix, sure I make grammatical errors, but if they appear in dialogue I sometimes leave them in because people do not always speak grammatically and I want my characters dialogue to be real.

Once the easy fixes are done I then read the story through, looking for obvious errors. That usually takes several days and when it’s done I copy the whole thing to a flash drive and hand it over to my very able editor who will go through it suggesting insertions and deletions, pointing out bits that don’t make sense, ‘Britishisms’ (that’s things we Brits say that make no sense in a trans-Atlantic context) and continuity.

My editor is good, very good and I usually get the file back with all sorts of helpful suggestions and comments. That’s when the hard work starts again. I go through each one, seeing if it works for me and fits the story. Almost invariably I accept about 90% of the suggestions and make the appropriate changes.

Then the story goes on hold for at least a week, sometimes two or three before I do my final read through. By this time I’ve read my own story so many times I can almost recite it so this last read through has to be done very carefully otherwise I may inadvertently miss something.

After that the story is done and ready for the publisher. It’s still not perfect though. No matter how many times I re-read my own work I always find something I would change if I could. I guess when striving for perfection none of us are ever satisfied.

Stop Press! Innocent? the fourth novel in the Dean and Steph series is now available on Amazon. Check it out at:


Sunday, November 9, 2014

Writing out of sequence? Not for me

I guess everyone has different ways of writing a novel. A friend recently posted that he is working on the third book of his series and he said he already has several scenes written which he will slot in at the appropriate places. Many of these scenes were written for book two and were not used and he says he may even save some of them for a possible fourth book. I've read his books, they are very good, they flow well and there is never a hint that any part is written out of sequence. My wife’s method is similar. She writes parts of her books and then writes round the scenes she has.

I can’t do that. When I sit down to write a novel I start with the first word on page one and write in chronological sequence until I get to the end. I never write a scene and put it in, I just can’t work that way. I may go back and tweak something, put a clue in here, take a too-obvious pointer out there, but I never go forward and write a whole chunk of the book. I think the reason for this is because when I start writing a book I generally know who the principle characters will be, I know how it will end and I know how I want to start it but once I've started to put words on paper and have introduced my people they simply take on a life of their own and go their own way.

I can’t write a scene for the middle of the book because these people I've created may never get to that situation. I don’t manipulate them, they find their own way to the final chapter and I don’t think I can work any other way.

The hardest part for me is always the beginning of a book. The prologue for “Innocent?” (coming out in December) is about three pages long but it took me weeks to write to my own satisfaction. Once I had it done though the rest of the novel just flowed because these characters took over but I agonized about how to get them started on their journey.


As I said, my friend is a good writer, his books sell well and his method obviously works for him. Personally I can’t work his way, just as well I guess, if were all the same the world would be a very boring place.

Friday, October 24, 2014

Okay, I'm sure many of you prefer being entertained to reading my thoughts so this week I'm putting up a piece of fiction and, as it's nearly Halloween, it has a loose connection with the season - enjoy.



Trick or Treat?

There was no getting away from it; Stu Evans was a mean man. Not physically mean, he didn’t physically hurt anyone, he was too chicken for that. He was tight-fisted mean. He wouldn’t spend a dime if a penny would do. He was also very wealthy. That was why, on Halloween, his long-suffering wife Margie expected a fight when she told him that she wanted to give candy away to the local kids.  

She didn’t get one. Stu merely grunted that he didn’t believe in Halloween and that the kids should be locked up for extortion. Margie was surprised at his reaction; she expected to hear far more venom. She asked him if he was okay but he just shrugged and said he was fine. He didn’t care what she did because he had a business meeting and would be out anyway.

What he neglected to say was his meeting involved a brief visit to an amateur art exhibition with his long-legged secretary followed by an intimate dinner for two. Stu was confident that he would not be back till morning but he did not tell Margie that.

When it came to art, Stuart knew what he was talking about. He owned his own gallery and had a reputation as a hard dealer who could spot new talent that others might miss. He never kept his artists long, he screwed too much out of them for them to stay, but he could find them.

Tonight’s soiree was put on by the instructor of a local night class and was being held in a couple of rooms adjacent to the town library. The moment he walked in Stuart’s heart sank. He had been hoping to find someone with a little promise here but one look around at the daubs adorning the walls showed him that these really were amateurs. Even the free glass of wine lacked any finesse and he wrinkled his nose in disgust after the first sip.

‘Come on,’ he said, ‘let’s get out of here.’

‘Oh,’ Lynette, his secretary pouted. ‘Some of these look real pretty. Can’t I just have one tiny look around in case there’s something I like?’

Stuart grimaced, Lynette’s idea of ‘real pretty’ meant that he was expected to buy her some awful canvas that should be consigned to the garbage can. It would be a waste of money but one look at those sexy green eyes was enough to tell him that it was going to be worth every dime.

‘Okay,’ he sighed. ‘But don’t expect me to come round with you, just pick the one you want and let’s get it over with.’ Lynette beamed and kissed his cheek.
‘Thanks, Stu,’ she said.

‘And take this crap with you,’ Stuart told her, handing her his glass of wine.

Lynette wandered off and after admiring the sway of her hips as she walked away, he turned back to the monstrosities hanging on the wall. They really were bad; some of the artists could barely draw. Shaking his head, he wandered into the second room and gave the paintings there a cursory glance. He was about to turn away and dismiss them when one caught his eye.

It was not a spectacular subject, just a country scene. It showed an old cabin with log walls and shingle roof sitting alongside a track lined by ancient oak trees. It was not even a very big picture but among such garbage, it shone out with a depth and vibrancy that grabbed his attention and held it.

Striding over Stu looked at it closely. The detail was amazing and just for a second he wondered if he was looking at a photograph, but then he saw the delicate brushwork. It was superb, worthy of any of the masters. The colours held a warmth and a depth that truly reflected nature. Stu knew instantly that he had found his next great talent.

Pinned alongside each painting was a small card bearing the title of the picture, the artist’s details and a price. This one was called ‘The Witch’s Place’. Instead of details though it just bore the name ‘Annie’ and a note saying that it was not for sale.

Stu grimaced. Most of the paintings were priced between fifty and a hundred dollars and he knew that he could get at least fifty times that for this one. He looked around, there was only one other person in the room. She was a short, pretty, blonde woman of about thirty-five.

‘Hey,’ Stu called to her, ‘are you anything to do with the people who did these?’ 

The girl frowned. ‘Yes,’ she replied, ‘I’m a member of the group. Is there something I can help you with?’

‘I want to buy this picture,’ Stu told her, gesturing at the painting. The girl leaned forward to look at it, frowned again and shook her head.

‘I’m sorry, that’s Annie’s,’ she told him. ‘She’s very old and she never sells her stuff.’

‘Aw come on,’ Stu protested. ‘Let me talk to her, I’ll treat the old girl, give her two hundred bucks for it.’ He reached for his wallet but the girl was shaking her head again.

‘Sorry, she’s not here,’ she said and then smiled. ‘She told us an old witch like her had better things to do on Halloween.’

Stuart gave a sigh of exasperation.

‘Okay,’ he said.

‘You’re welcome,’ the girl replied, turning away.

Stu’s forehead was furrowed in thought as he stared at the painting once more. It really was excellent. It was almost as if there was a breeze stirring the leaves of the trees and a wisp of smoke eddying from the chimney. He took a small magnifying glass from his pocket and leaned closer.

The detail was magnificent. There were no people but the cabin looked so real, it was almost as if he could reach out and touch it. He leaned closer and as he looked one of the drapes hanging at the windows of the building seem to twitch.

Stuart jerked back. He grinned and shook his head. It had to be good to make him imagine something in the painting moved. He had to have it. He looked round. For the moment he was alone in the room. Okay, he decided, if he could not treat the old woman, he would trick her. It was Halloween after all.

No one was watching; the picture was small and would easily fit under a folded topcoat. Slipping his coat off, Stu stepped forward and reached up to unhook the painting.

When Lynette came looking for him ten minutes later the only sign of him was his coat lying on the floor beneath a picture showing a country scene with trees and a cabin. She leaned closer to look at the picture. At one of the windows there appeared to be a screaming face.

Saturday, October 11, 2014

Where oh where?

Carla Kovach, a friend and fellow writer raised an interesting question this morning. Where should an author base his or her work? Should it be a fictional place or somewhere real?

The question arose because my friend has just published a novel. I haven’t had a chance to read it yet but having read her previous work I have no doubt it is excellent. The book is a crime story and she wanted to put an ad for it on a certain Facebook page but the page admins objected because they thought the fact that it was of the crime/murder genre might put people off visiting the place where the story is set.

I wouldn’t dream of criticizing their decision of course, it’s their page and they can say what should, and should not, be posted on it but it does raise the question of where to base a book.

Stephen King invented the town of Castle Rock, Maine, and more murder, mayhem, hauntings and nightmare occurrences have happened in that small town over the years than any other place else on earth yet he never has problems advertising his books. Would it have been that easy for him if he had chosen Bangor, Derry or any other small Maine town that actually exists and which might object to the depiction of blood on their streets?

Personally I base my crime stories on the tri-state area of West Virginia, Ohio and Kentucky. My hero’s office is in a little shopping plaza off the road where I live. The office is fictional but the plaza is there and so are almost all the other places I mention in my novels. The villages and towns in my historical novel “Weoley” are all there too. In some ways the way they developed over the centuries is different to the way I depict them but each exists and the book is a work of fiction so no one has complained that I have uncles murdering nephews in the middle of the Bristol Road as yet.

A lot of my research when writing a book involves my spending time on Google Maps, Google Earth and other websites. If one of my protagonists ducks down an alley you can be fairly certain the alley exists and that most of the surroundings are exactly as I describe them. I may put in the odd door, tree or clump of bushes but that is artistic license or simply because I think those things should be there and aren’t.

As I said at the start of this musing, whether to use a real or a fictional place is an interesting question. My friend tried to advertise her book on a site pertaining to the place where the novel set. She could not do so but equally, if she had set the story somewhere that doesn’t exist there would not be a site to post on anyway so she has lost nothing. Personally I intend to keep using real places in the belief that nature and the hand of man are probably more creative than my imagination. I’m not sure what my friend will do but if you want to check out her novels you’ll find them at:

Sunday, September 14, 2014

That ………

I guess we all develop various habits when we do something regularly. Some are good habits, some bad. This applies equally to writing as it does to everything else in life and I am one of the world’s worse when it comes to bad writing habits.

I do have some good habits such as writing something every day, always going back and reading over the previous day’s work before proceeding etc.

Unfortunately I also have some bad habits. “That’ is probably my worse habit. I put it in all the time, mostly where it is not necessary. I don’t think I use it in speech very often so I have no idea why I write it so much but I do.

I recently finished a first draft for a novel, eighty-five thousand words of scintillating prose any writer would be proud of….apart from the “that’s”. There were a lot of them. On my first read through I couldn’t help but notice them so I did a little test. I got the computer to count the number of times I’d used the word and then sat stunned as I looked at the answer. It was over one percent of the total. More than one word in a hundred was a “that” and that isn’t good enough.

There was only one thing to do. I highlighted every occurrence of the word and then read each sentence in which it occurred. In many of them “that” was just a redundant word; the sentence said the same with or without it so I deleted it. Then I read through the whole manuscript, looked at each remaining occurrence of “that” and tried to find a way of saying what I wanted in a different way without using the word.


In this way I managed to eliminate more than two thirds of the “that’s” in my story. I think the words flow easier and it reads much better without them but it did highlight that I like to use “had “ too so I repeated the process for that word also. It took several days to complete the exercise but it was worth it. I was left with a much smoother piece of writing and it taught me a valuable lesson. Henceforth I shall watch my “that’s” and “hads” when I write.


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Guilty? (Dean & Steph Book 1) by Derek Coleman (Jul 20, 2014) - Kindle eBook